by Chris WalkerPlot and setting inspired by Harry Potter.Prose style inspired by Dick and Jane.Let me give an example (Jamie is Pete's mother):
"Pete loved life as it was until his mother started dating.Jamie started to date this guy named Mark Jansen."
Why wouldn't someone write that thought as "Pete loved life as it was until his mother started dating this guy named Mark Jansen."?
There are other amateurish touches that indicate a beginning author who could really use an editor.Chapter One is superfluous exposition.The book should have started with the storm.Describing someones voice as "ordering" rather than, say, "strong", "confident" or even "powerful"?
I'm sorry.I don't want to be cruel to a novice author who has some good ideas and vivid imagery.But this is not a book I can recommend.
|Title||The Green-Eyed Necklace|
|eBook format||Paperback, (torrent)|
|Publisher||Tate Publishing & Enterprises|
|File size||2.7 Mb|
|Book rating||4.11 (9 votes)