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The Green-Eyed Necklace [PDF]

by Chris Walker
Plot and setting inspired by Harry Potter.Prose style inspired by Dick and Jane.Let me give an example (Jamie is Pete's mother):

"Pete loved life as it was until his mother started dating.Jamie started to date this guy named Mark Jansen."

Why wouldn't someone write that thought as "Pete loved life as it was until his mother started dating this guy named Mark Jansen."?

There are other amateurish touches that indicate a beginning author who could really use an editor.Chapter One is superfluous exposition.The book should have started with the storm.Describing someones voice as "ordering" rather than, say, "strong", "confident" or even "powerful"?

I'm sorry.I don't want to be cruel to a novice author who has some good ideas and vivid imagery.But this is not a book I can recommend.
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eBook formatPaperback, (torrent)En
PublisherTate Publishing & Enterprises
File size2.7 Mb
Release date 03.01.2012
Pages count194
Book rating4.11 (9 votes)
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1. Persia Emily | 08.12.2017 17:33

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Thank you! Great book!

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